Our Future by cuzwejamin

Blimey. I don't think I've seen this device before: two characters telling the same story. Jamming, if you like... You're right about the characters being lifelike - that's always half the battle. This is a very confident opener, and I'm already looking forward to cuzwejamin's next submission. I shall look out for it. Good flag, timnig64.

Thanks for taking the time to read my story and thanks for the comments, ladies and gentlemen. I just found this site the other day, but I will add some new stuff when I get a chance. Part of what i was trying to do was to have the confusing chronology of the story (eg: from a hypothetical future they talk about a past that hasn't happened yet), mirror the idea that our sense of what is to come is not so different from what is happening or has happened. They affect how we think and they say something about who we are in the same way that our past actions do. In conclusion, barely black francis, I wanted it to be a bit confusing, but I'm not sure if you were confused in the right way.

Hi Max - welcome. Quite a good story you've written, and in a way I've not seen. I first read it without the benefit of your explanation, and really enjoyed it, but I like it even more now - such an interesting opening. Looking forward to your next. foster.