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Hi I'm not a poet so am always wary of offering criticism of poetry. However I read your pieces and you are obviously writing about things close to your heart. At the moment it seems to me you have not really found your own voice, and your imagery is therefore not as original as it might be. There is such wonderful poetry on this site, using arresting and evocative language. I would advise reading as much as you can, analysing why things work, or don't, and looking at the way these poets put their individual stamp on ideas and images. It's not about imitating others but about seeing how language is used and the effects which can be achieved. Keep writing, and keep putting your work out there. For what it's worth, I thought your second poem had a stronger tone. M

Hi, I am not a poet, but I sometimes do it. I know its not very good, however I write it when I want to and for a reason/feeling. So I can only comment in relation to what I see myself doing when I try to write a poem. When reading this, what sprung to mind is that you are hiding behind your repetition. I have only read the one, I will read more at another time.