it rained sunday morning by aloe

I liked this too. It felt like it might be two poems though, I thought. If someone asked me for my opinion, which they haven't, I'd start the second poem at: I think you’re trying to sleep. I ask you if you are, and you raise an eyebrow, smile and close your eyes. I contemplate making tea. I like the self-destructive cycles of thought. The repetition works well. Cheers, Joe

Thats nice, but strangely by the end I am associating with the man who wants to sleep. In life there are the 'wakers' and the 'sleepers'. I personally am a waker in the morning and a sleeper at night. My GF is definitly a waker at night and a sleeper in the morning. We are still working through how this works. ;) Personally I don't think it needs to be prose. If anything I think it could be shorter. I would like it to focus more on the change in mood. Keep it up.

Wow, thank you all for your comments. It's made my day. I am still quite new to abc tales and i haven't really figured out the discussion boards yet. This is my first comment, if it goes well, i am sure it will be the first of many good day to you all Martha

nothing short of fantastic. thanks for sharing it.