Would love some feedback- comments welcome

Hello-

I am new to the ABCtales Family - I have posted some chapters on 3 novels I am writing "Antediluvian Trouble " , 'Matilda's Assignment" , "Moonlight Kissed", and would love any helpful writing tips from anyone who is willing to offer some. Critiques greatly appreciated. I added links to the stories.

http://www.abctales.com/story/penny4athought/antediluvian-trouble-chapter-1

http://www.abctales.com/story/penny4athought/matildas-assignment-chapter-1

http://www.abctales.com/story/penny4athought/moonlight-kissed-chapter-2

Many thanks,

Penny4athought