Pimms: Spack

I don't think there is anything wrong with flagging someone you know Span...I think the argument rears its ugly head when people ONLY flag or comment on their 'friends' stuff and nothing else. I liked this too, although I do have a problem with the first line, strawbs seems lazy to me (and really shouldn't be added to Pimms). I also felt that 'as the horizon butters' jarred a little, and feels very familiar like I have read the same thing somewhere recently. That's about it, am in agreement with regards a cherry also.

I actually liked 'horizon butters'

Hi, thanks for the comments Jude and Camus and for the flag Span. Camus, I think you are right about the sunset as melting butter image being a bit of a cliche - I tried to disguise it a little by changing the wording so that it wasn't so straightforward: "The sun sets like butter melting" but I'm glad you spotted it, I was only tricking myself that it wasn't still a cliche. But I have to say, I love putting strawbs in Pimms. And I'm a bit confused about what's lazy about the word strawbs? It wasn't laziness that stopped me typing the extra five letters to make it strawberries, I wanted a more chatty tone. And strawbs is a lovely word, I reckon. Thanks for the comments!

We chat with our palms pressed flat to the sky, crowns of light brambling through our finger-slats. Love this, Spack. Cherry, cherry, cherry!

I agree with Camus about Strawbs, though I'd say it's weak rather than lazy - 'strawberries' is such a nice word, whereas 'strawbs' sounds wanky in the extreme.

Alrighty Rokkit. Perhaps my middle classness was blinding me to "Strawbs" inherent wank. I cannot help it; Pimms makes me lose my critical faculty.