Emptiness by QueenElf

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Mon, 2006-05-08 13:10

http://www.abctales.com/story/queenelf/emptiness
Hi Lisa,
great! So full of emotion... the sense of loss, pain, and hopelessness. But the typo in the second to last line needs fixing, and the last line seems to repeat (the idea) the line before. But really touching.
Chris

Mon, 2006-05-08 16:20

Moimo

http://www.abctales.com/story/queenelf/emptiness very haunting. nobody

Mon, 2006-05-08 17:47

QueenElf

Thanks, I've edited the typo. The last four lines are meant to show a sort of "mental shrug of the shoulders", underlining the abscence of any hope. Lisax

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