The Last Room by Foster.

i was hooked into this and definetly want to know why the move is the best thing for the child. I think you descriptions were grounded in action and therefore the story flowed. I found the actual cabin in the meadow hard to picture, but i magine you would build on the description in further chapters. Don't forget to talk about smells and sounds as well as visual info, this will help bring the scene alive further. Juliet

Thanks for the flag, camus, and to both for your comments. It definately read name-heavy - thanks for pointing that out. I've edited out quite a few. Juliet, that's a great tip about smell - I've never described anything like that, always using sights and sometimes sounds. Thanks Again, foster.