skeletons by Danielle

Hey Danielle, I see you've found abctales. Congratulations on getting a cherry. This story was originally posted over at my website and I guess danielle found the link to this site from there. There are a couple of lengthy and good critiques over there (see them here). Someone had a rather interesting interpretation - that the tension of the story was all around the fact that Andrew really wanted to be with his sister. She made a pretty compelling argument. I took the more traditional interpretation, that andrew just felt stuck in the middle of these two women, whom he relied on to talk to about anything that was on his mind, but because of circumstance, was forced to lie. To me, if you take this as danielle's goal, then Andrew needs to be expanded. I need to know more about how he normally is with these girls, and how he's feeling now, because without that, I just became angry at Andrew, like he was being a coward by keeping secrets. The end, then, annoyed me, because I felt like Andrew didn't deserve to just have things fall into place. I was more interested in seeing the lies blow up in his face. Also, Danielle has yet to respond on here or over there. I'm curious to see what she was thinking when she wrote the piece and whether she is considering expanding it.

Hey Juliet and Max, thanks for the comments. Some readings were a little too into the subtext. I didn't intend for Andrew to have any feelings for Alexa beyond brotherly affection. I would like to expand this piece into a longer short story and would welcome suggestions about what I could bring out.

Hey Juliet and Max, thanks for the comments. Some readings were a little too into the subtext. I didn't intend for Andrew to have any feelings for Alexa beyond brotherly affection. I would like to expand this piece into a longer short story and would welcome suggestions about what I could bring out.