Plea for help

I wrote a story the other night that I hope to extend into a series. I was just hoping if all you 'ABCers' could do me a favour and tell if it is worth it. It seemed like a good idea at the time, but so do 99.9% of shorts.

Also, someone described it to me as noirish, something I didn't consider when writing. I considered it more of a cross between Sylvanian families (if any one remembers what they were), Kafka and PKD. I just wonder if you think I should follow the noir slant.

All your opinions would be welcome. Until then keep smiling.

PS Ignore the few typos- It got a cherry so I can't be arsed updating it.