nagrecords/red-shadow

i totally agree if you can get past the rather clunky start, this is a really good story that keeps you guessing but sort if half knowing all the way through, with a satisfying conclusion that is unexpected but right. Some of the sentences let it down and it seems to move POV or tense at some points. It needs strong editing in places and fine tuning in others. But you must change the sentences in the first para which make it sound like her eyes have dropped off onto the floor. Strong plot and an enjoyable read. Juliet

Very enjoyable but also agree with the above suggestions. It needs a really good edit, and perhaps a few less adjectives - toward the end I was expecting two or three with every sentence. I also noticed a few changes in tense. But it's worth working on because it's really good. foster.

The power of flagging - don't know if I'd have stuck with it otherwise but glad I read it. Well played for flagging it, nobody, a twisty tale indeed. Same as above, some of the sentence structure and descriptions were a bit stilted but the story shone through, worth some more input and cleaning up.