Fire and Ice

Hi all

I recently wrote a short story titled 'Fire and Ice'-
link below:
http://www.abctales.com/story/natalia/fire-and-ice

I plan to enter this in the BNZ Katherine Mansfield Short Story Competiton (Young Writer's Category).
Please read and give constructive feedback if you have time. It's my revised draft, but I am still working on some bits.

Thanks and regards
Natalia xx