My Demon - Chapter 3 by Lisa Hinsley

i agree with Maisie the pace has picked up nicely but not too fast. This chapter cleverly shows how Clive is manipulating Alex, particularly in the fact that before Clive you get the feeling that Alex would have helped her best mate... but now her inner world with Clive dictates her actions. Can't wait to see where this goes next. Juliet

MM, yes, I wasn't sure about this one from the first chapter and I did wonder how credible the way-out synopsis sounded - although it's got a light touch I don't see the story as hilarious comedy. But I like how the characters are developing - Lisa struggles with her own better nature and Clive, although good-looking and "a very hard demon to refuse", can't resist smirkng and being catty amidst the helpful advice and healing hands! I like the almost effortless way he tempts her into taking advantage of others' dishonesty and the crusading preacher who isn't aware that there's a demon a few feet away. Lots of potential here.

Yes Lisa does struggle with her better nature on most days, as does Alex! :) Thank you for all your positive comments on the forums. I have found it very hard putting up chapters of books vs short stories, so much more is invested, so much further to fall. And thank you for the cherry!