to bed by fergal
Sun, 2006-10-15 20:06
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to bed by fergal
http://www.abctales.com/story/fergal/to-bed
i stumbled over a couple of the line breaks, but it didn't matter, this scene is so vivid i can smell it. It brought back into focus a fantastic time in my life. Really enjoyed.
Juliet
mcmanaman
This is v cool Fergal, it flows really well because of the line breaks - I like
"but I stayed in my chair because I liked your tan
shoes"
and also seperating ping
pong.
Ace stuff.
ja_simpson
Thought this was excellent - I especially liked the idea of a slide show afterwards, like a porno re-run.