My silent undoing: Stones

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My silent undoing: Stones

http://www.abctales.com/story/my-silent-undoing/stones

This drew me in and made me go back several times.

I personally would enjoy it even more if the line breaks were not so short.

Wot anyone else reckons?

Span

Thank you. I'm not very good with my structuring.. it's quite hard to get it right, isn't it?
I really enjoyed this, and as span said, it drew me in too/ I quite like the line breaks like that, it makes it more choppy. Sorry I am probably going to show my ignorance, but what is a "Promethean Prophesy?"
Lol.. I don't think it actually means anything... I mean, the myth is hardly a prophesy, is it? But "artistic licence", etc - lol. It just hit the nail on the head of what I was trying to express.. *shrugs*. Thank you for the good critique though :)
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