morning glory by jamblichus9

http://www.abctales.com/story/jamblichus9/morning-glory

i really liked the opening of this short it placed you right in the middle of the scene. There are some great descriptions, i particularly liked this one as a description of her putting on the makeup.

"Her face is coming together, like a jigsaw puzzle, with the lines between the pieces all but invisible,"

however the rest of the second paragraph i felt was trying to hard to describe the make-up in an original way and consequently for me lost its realism e.g.

"the thin black petals of her eyelids are strengthened with a viscous tar-like liquid, secreted in a delicate tube, like a thousand exclamation marks around the eye itself, with a few flecks of black pollen blown onto her smooth cheeks."

i would use the word mascara rather than tar-like liquid, which sounds contrived, the exclamation marks is a good image, but a thousand?? and how did bits of her mascara get blown onto her cheeks?

once her make-up is done it slips back into what drew me at the start, the image of a mask is not new but the way you describe wanting to lift it off is fresh. Not sure on the title unless you are intentionally wanting to create ambiguity, morning glory means something very different to me :)

ty for the read

Juliet