flurtypete
Wed, 2007-02-28 15:34
#1
flurtypete
http://www.abctales.com/story/flurtypete/consultant-part-one
what do you think of this?
aside from the obvious problems with layout and spelling and so on i think it really has something ...
it kept me reading until the end - and is a fairly long piece ... it felt fresh in some way - a few turns of phrase that surprised
and i think what i really appreciated - none of the clumsy scene setting stuff that people often feel they need to use ...
littleditty
yep -engaging trip, down memory lane for me 1990-92 - spilling out on Noodles and Tokyo...liked the no caps/the i and I discussion - brings one out and in again - good trippy write, enjoyed!
drew_gummerson
Yeah, I liked it to. It started out Douglas Coupland and ended up Irvine Welsh.
Kept me reading as well and I want to know what happens next.
http://homepage.ntlworld.com/drew.gummerson2
skinsen
I liked the lay out. structure is subjective and shouldn't get in the way of a good story. this is worth a print out and a further read. Maybe the dialogue went on a bit? Having said the dialogue was excellent. Well done flurtypete; i enjoyed your story and that is what it is all about.
flurtypete
thanks for the comments folks. very encouraging and much appreciated!