A Comfort Blanket by Sniper

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Fri, 2006-09-29 09:54

http://www.abctales.com/story/sniper/a-comfort-blanket

This is one of those pieces where nothing gets in the way of the story - no awkward phrases or unnecessary chunks of description. You're only aware of the *tale* whilst reading it, not of the author or his technique, and that's exactly how I like my fiction. This author reminds me rather of alan_benefit, although that may just be me.
This man has talent.

Cathy

Sat, 2006-09-30 17:32

Juliet OC

i read this through a couple of times and yes i agree the dialogue is realistic, but i felt the characters need more development. Why has Sib reached that point? why did the narrator try to end his life 6 years before? Why is Bill so gad-damned happy with life? The motivations were not there for me. And the last line flummoxed me, but that is probably my dense brain. Juliet

Juliet

Sat, 2006-09-30 17:57

Maybe the author will enlighten us, but for what it's worth, here's my take on it. "Once againâ€¦ this" I believe referred to the humdrum, the workaday, the grind that has to be got through in life - ie their work(place). Sometimes it just feels as though we are living to work and there's no escape. Except of course that there is, but most of us wouldn't have the nerve to take it. Of course I may be wrong. As for the characters not being developed enough - for my own personal taste I'd disagree. I felt that I knew as much as I needed to about the characters in order to understand the story. If this were a novel then I'd like to know more, but for a short story I want it to *be* story, not loads of description and explanation.

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