Break by fergal
Sat, 2007-01-06 15:39
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Break by fergal
I'm no great judge of poetry but this one, I know, is a gem:
span
Agreed! It is brilliant!
I can always tell when I think something is really good cos I wish I had written it. h x
drew_gummerson
Yeah, I really enjoyed this one too.
Brooklands
I like this alot, particularly the repeated RE teacher line and the laughter pay-off in the final line.
Thanks!
Joe
mcmanaman
I loved this, there was something really uplifting about the characters when they laugh. Ace poem!
fergal
Thanks - those comments from such good poets made my evening. Nay, my week. Glad you found them uplifting Mcmanaman - I wanted it to be a happy poem, and I wanted the specifics to make it uplifting. So, yay!
Georgie
Well done Fergal. I hope people appreciate how hard it is to write a poem like this. It's hard to keep the language simple (therefore keeping your writerly ego out of it) and still get the complications of the relationship in there, but you did it.
Also, isn't it weird that people sleep with each other? Disgusting.
fergal
High praise indeed from Georgie, one of my favourite writers on the site... and yes, it is weird that people sleep with each other. Disgusting. As for sex, well. Sheesh. Even worse.