Transmute

Yes, this is a fantastic poem.10/10 Great Stuff. And here's the link: http://www.abctales.com/story/narcissa/transmute cheers soraia

I couldn't agree more - hence the cherry. It has a fine image embedded in the core of the poem -it's original, witty and wise. This is a writer who is gettting better and better.

Yes, I knew it reminded me of another poem when I first read it.. I have to say that Unremarkable Death is one of my favourite poems on abc, I love the stark, honest almost brutal quality of it, and I never tire of re-reading it.

Wow, Unremarkable Death is amazing! That it could have a similar form to mine and yet be so completely different is astonishing- we've taken it in different directions. I keep clicking that link and reading it over and over! :D Thanks to josiedog, Soraia and tony - glad you like it (!!), it needs a bit of tweaking but it's almost finished, unlike most of my poetry, so I'm happy about that.

http://www.abctales.com/node/543422 - unremarkanle death (i like the title) brutal. honest. re-readable. tight. angry. great.

one of the most powerful paras I have read in a while - almost perfect: I want you crossing a road in some other country just out, fetching hleb and cigarettes. I want you struck, suddenly by a cheap red car with a trailer. An unremarkable death.

Does anybody like my poem, then? Glad we're sticking to the topic :) *sulks in the corner*

That is beautiful too :) No problem at all, was just wondering if you liked mine just say yea or nay (or elaborate if you wanted) xx

Thanks, Barely Black Francis! I know what you mean - and how could you help it, Unremarkable Death is... I can't find a strong enough adjective for it! If it weren't for you I wouldn't have read it :) so thank you! And thanks, Pesky! I've just been flicking through more of your work (those that I haven't already read, that is) which is brilliant :D of course.

Cherry situation now sorted - you only have to ask and much can be amended!