WHAT DO YOU THINK

I think what barely black was trying to say is, you need to read others work on here first and get involved in discussing it, then others will be more likely to read your work and comment back. One of the best ways to improve your own writing is to read and comment on other writing - so happy reading. Juliet (yes Pesky i have converted, humble pie aint so bad:)

tyler is awesome ^^ anyways i thought your story was awesome and next time ill try and get all the damn caps locks and whatnot and try to make the story more "enjoyable" for the "sophisticated losers" on this site.

oh and p.s. i am not disciminating against anyone or any person who thinks so.. its my own personal opinion.. oh and tyler you are not stupid

Tyler, I'm by no means an authority but I've suggested to people before (and I'll suggest to you now) that you should not underestimate the importance of good spelling and grammar. The words on the page are how you present yourself to a reader and are cruicial. The way you use grammar is one of the fundementals of finding your 'voice' in writing, and shouldn't be underrated, if you want to be taken seriously. I think the idea for this is good, but I would suggest working a little more on establishing the character. It feels a little rushed, but could become something really good with a little patience. For the record, I agree with the others that people really should make an effort to discuss and flag others' work before expecting meaningful comment on their own. And I've said many times before, I think flagging one's own work is poor form (unless there's a real reason to - few and far between). Enzo.. www.thedevilbetweenus.com

by the way its not victoria its veronica ^^

my name is veronica thank you very much... my sister is named victoria and shes at a friends house right now... please look at my poems ^^

Today's a bank holiday here in the states...as you can all see.

can anyone please read my poems.. i know i might sound lame but... PLEASE?

..... school is closed for us anyways...

tyler please go on msn i need to talk to you

Ok just because Tyler can't spell doesn't mean you also have to put him down. Also just because a person can't spell doesn't mean that they can't make awesome stories.

Tyler, Once Victoria comes back home she could probably send you Microsoft Word and then you can spell check your stories. Or you can just send me the stories and I'll spell check the stories by hand. It's pretty fun to do too. Can you please go on Msn Messenger? I need to talk to you. Love, Veronica P.S. Don't freak out about the love part.

Welcome Tyler and Vaspa, it sure is awesome to have you here in our awesome little community. Vaspa, just because someone suggests that the awesome Tyler pays more attention to his Grammar does not mean that they are having a go at him, they are just suggesting awesome ways in which he can make his awesome stories more awesomely readable. As for your poetry...AWESOME, is school open again tomorrow by any chance?

school is open tomorrow for us anyways.. and thank you about my poems. i greatly appreciate it. oh and by the way i love the way you use the word awesome ^^

totally.

Aww Pesky, you awesome sweetie, thanks!

Tyler, try yahoo or icq or any other messenger service that is available....PLEASE

ok... *waits patiently* ....*looks at watch*..... well this is taking some time.... i want to ask you something Tyler but I'm afraid you'll freak at me...

I just wanted to ask you a question but since you are mad at me for some odd reason I guess I should just go away. Plus I'm not joking around. Maybe I should die?

number one... pesky i like how you write.. number two barely black.... you can leave me alone

Ok, hun - it's only because the two of you wouldn't take the hint and it got rather irritating. Please try and hear what people are saying, Vaspa, and then they won't get so arsey with you. Good luck with your writing and all that...

Face, bovvered? Nah, we ain't bothered Tyler, now be a good boy and stop shouting...and don't swear at the adults young man!

I'm not bovvered though.

God barely black... so immature... taking your fuckin anger out on other people.. so immature... and how old are you? I'm 13 and I can probably better than you ever could in your life.

God barely black... so immature... taking your fuckin anger out on other people.. so immature... and how old are you? I'm 13 and I can probably act better than you ever could in your life.

innit

What a ******* liberty!

sorry about the first post.. I accidentally forgot a word and I pressed it twice. ok 2Lou I can do that.. Thanks for the advice.. sometimes when I'm irritated I really don't listen to what other people think.

aright.

yea but no but yea but no but yea but Pesky was in me computer thing and it wos her that made me do weren't it, and then like that Lou from over there she came past and she said like what eva, and then they made me be horrible you know.

Ok...on a serious note now as I suspect this is the only way we can acheive some peace (although I have laughed so much that kids are threatening to phone men in white coats). Tyler, the same applies to your writing as celery wrote about your friends. It is ok for school, but unfortunately not good enough to warrant comments on here, sorry if this seems cruel, but hey, you did ask.