Requesting Feedback on Poem

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Thu, 2011-08-18 07:20

I'd appreciate it if anyone left a constructive comment on my poem "Sing me a lullaby to calm the fast-approaching storm." [http://www.abctales.com/story/whiskey-corsage/sing-me-lullaby-calm-fast-...

I would like specific feedback on:

-Line Breaks
-Technique
-Interpretation

[But of course, it can also be anything not stated on the list.]

Thank you so much in advance, for sharing your knowledge and time. To show my gratitude, I'll critique any of your literary pieces in return.

Raven [whiskey-corsage]

Thu, 2011-08-18 07:20

whiskey-corsage

http://www.abctales.com/story/whiskey-corsage/sing-me-lullaby-calm-fast-... Oops--the link up there isn't working. Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart. -William Wordsworth

-Raven (:
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Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart. -William Wordsworth

Thu, 2011-08-18 07:46

Highhat

Hi Whiskey -C you don't need to ask for comments- they'll come especially when you also follow others pieces of work and comment on them- you may get the same kind of feedback as you give out. That's the way it works!! Welcome to ABC- you got a good start. I thought your poem was very good. keep writing (and commenting) atb ;)Pia

Thu, 2011-08-18 09:01

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whiskey-corsage

Thank-you Pia! Your comment was incredibly sweet and this warm welcome even more so. I'm already starting to love this tightly-knit community. And yes, yes I will! -Raven (: -- Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart. -William Wordsworth

-Raven (:
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Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart. -William Wordsworth

Thu, 2011-08-18 09:01

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whiskey-corsage

-Raven (:
--
Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart. -William Wordsworth

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