Strong Words
Fri, 2003-08-22 16:36
#1
Strong Words
Good advice i was given long ago.Put the important word in a sentence just before the full stop.
e.g. He ran sobbing through the rain.-becomes-As he ran through the rain he sobbed.
Does it work??
Mia
Personally, "As he ran through the rain he sobbed" sounds a bit stilted to me, but that's just one opinion.
Mia
Andrea
Me too. 'He ran through the rain sobbing' sounds a lot better.
Flash
'Running through the rain he began sobbing!
nitromoose
'Running through the rain he began sobbing, then realised he was being dumb and smiled again!'
Steven
I would suggest, "He ran through the rain, sobbing." I agree pretty much with Andrea, except that I would put a comma after rain.