rubber covered brake unloaded castors by Jack Cade

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Fri, 2006-06-30 10:54

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this is compeltely off the wall but a compelling read. The beach scene is so vivid i could smell the salty seaweed. Not sure about the epilogue, seems a bit rushed, but as this is apparently part of a larger piece (novel) then i am sure it will be revisited and refined over time.

I really enjoyed its kookiness and the images of the turtle and seagull really work. The poetry discussions between the two sisters are really insightful but i think a reader would need some basic understanding of poetic form to not get lost. Sort of like read Stephen Fry before reading this.

Great idea

Juliet

Fri, 2006-06-30 11:24

Brooklands

Great. Enjoyed this. "Smoking like the International War Room" is great. The dog like a wet cannonball, too. The epilogue does feel a bit out of place here. Perhaps, in the context of the book, you could just end the chapter on a semi-cliff-hanger - Sian being taken away by the cops. Then when you start the scenes with her in jail, we will find out what has happened. Leaves a bit of suspense, innit. Ta! Joe

Sat, 2006-07-01 15:13

Jack Cade

Cheers, guys. The ending was indeed rather rushed - I got a bit fed up with it, and will have to go back after I've refreshed. Good pointers!

Sat, 2006-07-01 16:41

mykle

I really enjoyed the inventiveness and the whacky surrealism. I found the image of the boss seagull both hilarious and haunting... but then I spend a lot of time on the beach.

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