Muswell Hill Time Travellers

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Muswell Hill Time Travellers

I likes it a lot.

http://www.abctales.com/story/jack-cade/muswell-hill-time-travellers

Not sure about the bit in brackets.

I think it gets super good from 'we chased cats'.

Span

Loved it! You know, that sounds like the start to a really good action movie - something with that xxx (Van Diesel?) guy. Lots of blowing things up, yea!
My only suggestion is to change the first 'machine' to 'it' - 'we use it'; I think you can afford to hold out on the reader for a couple of lines rather than blowing your load straight away in a big information super-gazz. If you want my body and you think I'm sexy...
So, some are disregarding the Directives - it's not really surprising considering the collapse. I wonder if we will survive the consequences...
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