Bright eyes - sixteen grinding

i did too. i enjoyed the grit within the cutesy form of "teenage discoveries." i've never been able to offer much crit in the area of poetry, but one thing did stand out. i've always been an advocate of short/long sentences in prose, and i think you had a nice assortment within the poem (i liked the somber 'hug' line after the dirty dancing sequence). however, the one line describing how the auntie set them free had some longer words that i think may have muddied the flow of the stanza. although i'm speaking from personal (prose) experience, i find that using shorter words speeds things up and allows for that crazed/drugged feeling you seem to be aiming for. nice work. i like the scenery at the very end. -rtavs