RE: beautiful Tornado (i beg of you good people, for the love of man.. karma knows if you've been bad or good..)

Topic posted in response to beautiful Tornado : http://abctales.com/story/alan-thomas/beautiful-tornado

i would be extremely appreciative of some feedback on my short story.. lots of blood, sweat, and tears went in to it.. well, ok, there was no blood (there will NOT be blood (movie idea?)). there was some sweat, but not from writing the story.. hmm.. oh, but there were tears. so anyhow, i put a lot of effort into it! give it a read, if you will. thank you and good day.

alan thomas