Hate to ask

I've just read your latest post, Sunday Morning http://www.abctales.com/story/ellenbell/sunday-morning The idea of the story is touching enough, but grammatical errors throughout made it difficult to focus on much else. Several times you used 'your' in place of you're. You used the phrase 'sat in silence' three times... And the LY adverbs were a bit overused - I try not to use them at all with my current pieces, though I once used them more often. Like I said, the scene is a nice one, I liked it, but I'd suggest a rewrite, tighten it up, pull out all words not needed, and see what you get...you might like it better and you might hate it. foster.

I enjoyed reading your work . I think the scope is awesome already but the first posting haunts me because I am tempted to believe it is possible. Senior2tor