OBJECTIVE CRITIS

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OBJECTIVE CRITIS

Hello everyone,

FRANK CRITICISM SOUGHT.

As an octogenarian, I obviously ain’t got too many more years’ left to live. Nevertheless, I’d dearly like to write summat for the ‘moral edification’ of those who are lucky enough to have been born long after the momentous events which so sadly marked one’s life in 1930’s and 1940’s Britain.

May I say briefly, that during WWII, I was a schoolboy and quite old enough to understand and share the fear and tragedy that the conflict inflicted upon my elders.

As a young adult and professional soldier, I served in the now long forgotten, bitterly ugly Korean War.

Subsequently, I worked in the poverty-stricken, former British colonies in West Africa, whose indigenous peoples were pitilessly exploited by the unrestrained forces of rampant capitalism –forces which have now become so powerful as to be able to challenge the very stability of so-called ‘western democracy’.

Finally, on marrying a Spaniard, I settled in Madrid, working for many years as a technical writer and translator (electronics).

Anyway, enough of my pretentious self-adulation and boring ol’ political rhetoric and back to the point…

These are just a couple of the many notes I’ve made –which of course, are far too alliteratively Dickensian and merit the undivided attention of homicidal subeditor’s hatchet. However, I’d warmly welcome anyone’s constructive comments. Are the essential elements of my geriatric drooling of any REAL interest or NOT???

MY NOTES:
1.
True! During WWI, Anglophone Allied forces employed members of many ethnicities to try to confound the Axis enemy: Gaelic speakers, Germans, Italians, Japanese, Navaho Indians, Welsh speakers and whatnot.

2.
Anecdotally, I well remember an extraordinarily ruddy-cheeked, red-haired Scots wireless operator, whose robust, Viking-like visage gave one the distinct impression that his glowing ‘bonce’ would explode into spontaneous combustion at any minute. This enthusiastic, National Service (conscripted) lad who hailed from a treeless, windswept remote Hebridean Isle, was a native Gaelic speaker, who’s everyday utterances in the King’s English were about as intelligible to his comrades as the monosibyllic grunts of a love struck Simian’s callings to its mate. But once he’d press the radio’s SEND button, a miracle would happen. It was though there were a linguist metamorphosis which elevated his locution into the uppermost realms of the exquisite. I don’t think that ever heard clearer enunciation in all my long life!
END.

Thanks,

Jim.

Hello Jim, everyone has a story to tell, and I don't think it's so much what you've done, as how you tell us about it. We can all read about WW2 - the official history, the dates, the battles. You can tell us how it felt - you can add your little bit of the jigsaw - the inconsequentialities, the things that aren't in the history books. I think they're just as important. Don't tell us anecdotes from the point of view of someone looking back - tell us how it was then. Try reading some of the more recent pieces from celticman here on ABC. He writes about the most mundane things, but he does it so beautifully. I really look forward to reading what you have to write!

 

Yes, and so would I look forward to it. You definitely have a story to tell. You've already got me intrigued with your red-headed wireless operator. Go for it! Moya
 
Agree with everything thats been said already Jim. My father in law is 86 and as bright as a button. He tells some fantastic stories about his time in the Royal Navy when he was part of the occupied forces in Japan just after the war. We all sit there enthralled, listening to a story he's recalling about an old comrade getting drunk on too much rum ration. So yes please Jim, write and I'll definately read.

 

Welcome Jim. Your preamble is both interesting and shows glimpses of delightful vocabulary and powers of description; these last are of great importance in terms of engaging and maintaining the readers interest. You will get feedback here (although not as much or as often as you would like!). In my experience it is almost invariably positive and helpful. For my part I would advise you to keep your target readership's preferences in mind. The description of the Gaelic speaking Hebridean is engaging and I thought beautifuly related but I can quite see how some readers might find it a little heavy handed. I suppose that this comes down to the old writer's adage of 'show, don't tell'. Give credit to the readers imagination to create their own pictures. I think I have started to ramble so I'll stop! Good luck.

 

Hello .. l would also read your stories. Thank you for sharing. Denise
To answer your question, yes, your writing of real interest and most welcoming. To read events during WWII from someone who actually lived through it is most interesting and intriguing. I wrote a biography for a local man who is now ninety-two, entitled This Blood Red Sea, telling how his first ship was torpedoed and how he spent eighteen days in a lifeboat. He later served as a Royal Navy DEMS gunner aboard SS Rathlin, a rescue ship that sailed with the infamous Arctic convoy, PQ17. Although his memory was waning, he had me transfixed by his recollections of his wartime exploits. I enjoyed meeting him at my local social club, as he sipped his rum and talked endlessly. I respect you greatly for the Korean War was indeed a brutal conflict and you deserve much praise for serving your country. That gifted writers have responded to you is testament that there is interest in what you have to say, and you do write well. Good luck.

 

Hi Jim. Go for it I say. My late Dad wrote his wartime memories down when he was well into his 80s. I put them on here for him (An Ordinary Man), and still have some notes to transcribe. Your memories are history and of enormous interest and worthy of great respect. Linda

Linda

Hi Jim. I'd be really interested to hear your rocollections about wartime or anytime. I'm sure you have many interesting stories to tell, and many for us to read. Everyone has something to say that people can learn from, no matter what age we are, but if you've been around for 80 odd years, you've got to have loads of interesting stuff in your locker, especially about the war. I look forward to reading you. Welcome to the ABC community. Trev

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