Feedback please

I enjoyed the 'alien experiences' piece but I would have liked it to be woven into more of a story. The 'where do you belong' question is there but it needs more of a framework. In this story you avoid the dilemmas you face yourself and so the nub of the argument is left dangling. If you could describe the situation - why you went to South Africa, what you expected to find, and what circumstances you are in - into the story then I think we would better understand the connection and the clash between yourself and Rita. It's a good start but I think it needs work!