Johnny Weir, I hope by Brighteyes

http://www.abctales.com/story/brighteyes/johnny-weir-i-hope Brighteyes, this ace. As is Johnny Weir. There is nothing I enjoy more than watching a bit of figure skating, and Johnny certainly came up with the goods. My personal favourite moment of the Olympic iceskating (apart from Johnny and his red glove) came with the Italian couple who were on Olympian Last Hurrah and turned up to the waltz part of the competition looking like they were headed to a luau bullfight. They were henceforth known in my house as Matador Ken and Hula Barbie's Mum. In their second dance, he fell over and pulled her down with him and at the end of the dance, she stood in the middle of the ice and glared at him for fully three minutes. Very amusing. I have just re-read your poem to see if I could pick out any lines I especially liked, but apart from agreeing with Gilbert on the cheekbone line, I just thought it worked really well as a whole. There should be more poems about figure skaters. I'm going to go and write one about Michelle Kwan. lib

Oh, I enjoyed this! 'Leap like a shot fawn'. Just great. I, too, would omit the 'hopety hope', and you might consider dropping the 'young David Bowie.' and just leaving in Ziggy Stardust (it's self-referencing); also perhaps : 'was the tale told of you and the single red glove you named Camille and used to wear while spraying ice, triple toe-loops' would work as: 'was the tale of the single red glove/you named Camille', i.e. compound it a little. He is, incidentally, 21 or 22 I think.

Yes! My lust is legal! Sorry, composing myself again now. Thanks for the feedback guys - really helpful. I've got to step back from the hopety hope line, as it seems fun to me, but if it's not working for everybody else, it's just me being self-indulgent. Will have a go at changing it. Lib - love the tale of Matador Ken and Hula Barbie's Mum! They do often look a bit demented, some of these skaters, but that girl was obviously a sulky cow. I feel for her poor partner! David Bowie - I kinda like the rhyming and wordplay in that bit but again, I'll see if it can be snipped without losing that. I do agree wholeheartedly with the compounding of Camille. That's a great idea for the rhythm. Thanks folks! brighteyes x "I have a room for life at the Home for the Chronically Groovy."