The silver coin

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Tue, 2006-12-12 16:07

The silver coin

just added a story - am not asking for opinions from readers if they do not wish to give any - however I am a little unsure about the title - so if anyone has had the chance to read it and has any suggestions for an alternative title please feel free to share.

cheers

Tue, 2006-12-12 17:25

jxmartin

Ellen, I think your title is appropiate enough. The story line is well developed and reads easily. As a reader, I might like to have you set up the era in which the characters find themsselves, so it would be more intelligible and enjoyable to me. You make good use of antagonist vs protagonist. A little polishing will make this piece shine like a briight penny. J.X.M

Tue, 2006-12-12 17:26

jxmartin

Ellen, I think your title is appropiate enough. The story line is well developed and reads easily. As a reader, I might like to have you set up the era in which the characters find themselves, so it would be more intelligible and enjoyable to me. You make good use of antagonist vs protagonist. A little polishing will make this piece shine like a briight penny. J.X.M

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