RE: SEPARATING

Topic posted in response to SEPARATING : http://www.abctales.com/story/laurapayne/daughter

Following first submission and wonderful comments received from some of you guys I've recently modified this poem with a change of title from The Daughter to Separating and inserted a few words that give the moment being expressed (marriage breakdown)more clarity. I recently read the revised format at the ABC Tales evening in London. Feedback would be good!

Thanks for all the advice!