Miss Mindthegap's day out
Wed, 2005-12-14 15:08
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Miss Mindthegap's day out
Hello everyone! I have just joined your really interesting website, and I posted one story! I would be extremely interested in your opinions about it! Thanx!!
camus
Welcome!
http://www.abctales.com/node/546956
camus
ermmm...Andriana you seem to have forgotten to put in any puntuation, it makes it incredibly difficult to read. I would suggest editing it and then trying again.
andriana
thanx for reading it! i haven't forgotten to put punctuation, this was completely on purpose and I wanted it to have this effect mentioned later on the forum... making someone feel dizzy...
archergirl
oops! See my thread! Must've been writing at the same time!
lisa h
Had a read through, you have an interesting style, and the addition of punctuation would help, but I see what you were trying to do.
Anyhow, welcome to the site. :)
Lisa
my silent undoing
I really liked it without punctuation, actually. It made me feel all dizzy.
tbisamf
Andriana is a very bright young woman. She writes very good poems as well. I am glad she joined abctales.
my silent undoing
Eh?
*smells something*
andriana
thanx for reading it! I really appreciate your feedback and your encouraging or advisory comments!
tbisamf
Eh?