No Matter What Happens - MSU

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Wed, 2006-01-18 00:21

Anonymous

No Matter What Happens - MSU

http://www.abctales.com/story/my-silent-undoing/no-matter-what-happens

I have really begun to look forward to each new offering from MSU and with this one, I've realised exactly why:

Atomsphere.

I liked this piece, but I'm not flagging it because I think it's MSU's best work (but don't take that as a criticism, I think it's excellent), I'm flagging it to make a point.

I think this is a great example to a lot of our recent younger additions to ABCTales of how you hold together an atmosphere. It doesn't take a lot of words, and a lot of in-your-face hyperbole, it just takes a good structure, careful choice of words, a pinch of consideration for how your reader will perceive it, and a lot of practice. In MSU's case, a whole lot of talent is clearly an advantage too!

Thanks for another good'un, MSU.

Ben

Wed, 2006-01-18 08:32

fergal

I really enjoy MSU's writing too. It has that paired down, just right words style that I enjoy so much, with original imagery and interesting ideas. It is always easy to read - disarmingly so - but there is always lots going on under the surface. It is very polished, and very good.

Wed, 2006-01-18 11:30

my silent undoing

Thank you, Ben and Fergal - your comments mean a lot to me. I'm glad that you liked it! Thank you for taking the time to read it, as well - and bringing attention to it.

Wed, 2006-01-18 11:40

littleditty

agree with what has been said -thank you for bringing this to my attention - i will read more as this gave me the shivers - truly layered work, appearing simply drawn - i like this - poetic x

Wed, 2006-01-18 12:09

Juliet OC

i had to read this twice, as i read it too glibly the first time. It's plot is very subtle, and understated which kind of fits with what he has done, getting drawn in through small behaviours, though his last behaviour is grand and makes you realise the enormity of where he has ended up. The bath time scene is very poignant, a great story. I need to work on saying more with less in my short stories, so i will keep this in mind as my template, thanks. .Juliet

Juliet

Wed, 2006-01-18 17:09

ely_whitley

yeah, I enjoyed it too. I felt like there were gaps in the story, or rather that emphasis and detail could have been shifted from one place to another but that's just a very vague feeling and nothing to shoot me in the bottom for. I could see where it was going and then almost stopped reading at the bathroom scene because I hadn't seen it going THERE. Thankfully it turned away at the last minute so I read on.

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