The enigma that is Chris9999¦

OK, Chris, you asked for it! A few technical points on the latest pieces… Early one morning 2nd sentence: shouldn’t that be “As I came closer”…? Or a comma or semi-colon after “closer”? Sharp alligator 1. Don’t you mean “steel alligator”…? 2. 2nd sentence could do with a couple of commas! After “us” and “steps” 3. “footsteps” should be one word. 4. “Sharp tongued” could probably do with a dash (“Sharp-tongued”) Manky teeth 1. “slander of bitter sharp painfully to my ears” would perhaps read better (& make more sense… relatively speaking!) as “slander of bitter-sharp, painful to my ears” 2. “Breathe out the love breathe in the light, for fill your mantra”… suggest: “Breathe out the love, breathe in the light, fulfil your mantra”… 3. Last sentence… question mark? The trials of life 1. “everyday” should be one word. 2. …as should “humpbacked”… 3. Don’t you mean “Giddy spells had to be cast”…? 4. Shouldn’t that be “his falling down stance”…? 5. “Gob full’s” should be “Gobfuls” (not that this is technically a word, but who am I or Lewis Carroll to speak ill of such things?) * * * Overall I like that many of your pieces don’t make that much narrative sense, but are just sort of playing with words, language, sentence structure. I am very much into the idea of messing with the concept of “What is a story?” which is why your stuff very much appeals! “Early one morning”… brilliant imagery… perhaps could go further…? (Have you thought about collaborating with visual artists or otherwise having your work illustrated in some way?) ~PEPS~ “There is no spoon.”

Chris can’t be Spartarcad, Dr J, he makes far more sense…! ;-) Chris… there you are, you see, I’m psychic – I just knew there should be some visual element to your work! I’ve just started looking into the possibility of collaborating with visual artists myself… bringing the words off the page, as it were… Re dyslexia… the number of artists I’ve spoken to who have said they are dyslexic! I think the thing is that language is, essentially, a logical, structured thing, which the creative side of the brain doesn’t gel with… one could say that being creative with language is a fundamental inconsistency… ~PEPS~ “There is no spoon.”

Another one... http://www.abctales.com/story/chris9999/a-little-duck ...perfect!! :-) ~PEPS~ “There is no spoon.”