Day 08 Idol by jack cade
Wed, 2007-04-18 16:46
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Day 08 Idol by jack cade
I loved this until I reached the end. I just don't feel that the last section does justice to the poem and undermines the wonderful allusions of the start. I'm sure it's purposeful but is it right? Your thoughts?
chant
amazing what a title change can do. remove all reference to the dreadful Belinda Carlisle and suddenly i'm interested. :-P
JK
Yep, there is a change in tone/structure with the last paragraph.
I don't think there's anything wrong with the last paragraph, but I was a little disappointed that the poem ended so soon. This is not a criticism, more of a compliment.
Jack Cade
Forgot to say thanks for the comments.
I think the ending is abrupt, and does undermine the imagery. It was at least partially intentional, because the imagery was deliberately over-zealous, and I wasn't confident that people would get the joke unless I undermined it.
Chant - I think it's funnier if it's about BC. She is, after all, not just cheesy and vacuous, like so many popstresses, but also a bit of a has-been. Crucially, she's also the only vacuous popstress whose presence in poetry I could tolerate. The likes of Debbie Harry are too cool for the send-up treatment, while others are just too vile. BC is harmless, but in no way hip.