Feedback wanted
Tue, 2010-03-02 09:58
#1
Feedback wanted
Hi
I've recently started a new fiction project set in a Survivors type, post apocalyptic world. I've written two versions of an initial chapter and would love some feedback on what direction to take it.
The first version is set several years after some kind of plague and can be found here:
http://www.abctales.com/story/t-crask/path-through-wood-chapter-1-version-1
The second version is set only a week or two after society has finally collapsed, and can be found here:
http://www.abctales.com/story/t-crask/path-through-wood-chapter-1-version-2
I'd really love to know which version you prefer, and get your general thoughts on each. In return, I'd be happy to do the same for anyone else.
Thanks
Keep Writing xxx