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cheers scratch, just playing
Posted on Fri, 07 Nov 2014
cheers scratch, just playing with words. Thanks Shannan, I wish I knew what it meant too. Often (more often than I'd like to admit) I've not got a clue whant a poem is and more often than that what it all means. I'm pretty good at deciphering...
Home from school for the Summer, I had been enjoying a leisurely reintroduction to home, taking my dog Barney out for walks [Back from school > that way you don't use home twice in the same sentence]
cast (not callously caste) although caste is perhaps nearer the mark. I'm sure everything will turn out wonderfully well when your shoplifting skills get better. I thought paracetamol screwed up your liver (not your kidneys) and was usually fatal...
had to look up arpicity. Enjoyed the mixing of astronomy, metrical feet and hands and knees. In other words I enjoyed this poem. Almost there with Ex. You've done a great job. A little more and you'll be there. Where, I'm not sure exactly.
cheers scratch, just playing
Posted on Fri, 07 Nov 2014
cheers scratch, just playing with words. Thanks Shannan, I wish I knew what it meant too. Often (more often than I'd like to admit) I've not got a clue whant a poem is and more often than that what it all means. I'm pretty good at deciphering...
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fall in love ju[s]t by its
Posted on Fri, 31 Oct 2014
fall in love ju[s]t by its words' I often wonder what poety is (and is not).
Read full commentPosted in A Poets Mystery Lane
Home from school for the
Posted on Tue, 28 Oct 2014
Home from school for the Summer, I had been enjoying a leisurely reintroduction to home, taking my dog Barney out for walks [Back from school > that way you don't use home twice in the same sentence]
from los parentes [should this be...
Read full commentPosted in A Wake for Barney
cast (not callously caste)
Posted on Tue, 21 Oct 2014
cast (not callously caste) although caste is perhaps nearer the mark. I'm sure everything will turn out wonderfully well when your shoplifting skills get better. I thought paracetamol screwed up your liver (not your kidneys) and was usually fatal...
Read full commentPosted in The Diary of an Aspiring Hitman - Chapter 2
good twist and it does seem
Posted on Tue, 21 Oct 2014
good twist and it does seem to match fairy lore, perhaps the last paragraph is unnecessary?
Read full commentPosted in Wind Dancer
Nature is as precise an
Posted on Wed, 01 Oct 2014
Nature is as precise an accountant as any. [delete last two words]
Wonderful story and the telling it of it wasn't bad either, spicy and full of sausage (oh dear, couldn't help that pun).
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had to look up arpicity.
Posted on Sun, 28 Sep 2014
had to look up arpicity. Enjoyed the mixing of astronomy, metrical feet and hands and knees. In other words I enjoyed this poem. Almost there with Ex. You've done a great job. A little more and you'll be there. Where, I'm not sure exactly.
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dimly-lit students'. You
Posted on Fri, 26 Sep 2014
dimly-lit students'. You maybe better finding another description that's too much like a light bulb.
.There's no such thing...' ditch the full stop at the begining of this section.
Do what thou wilt is the whole...
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yep, I'm with Charles Schultz
Posted on Sun, 21 Sep 2014
yep, I'm with Charles Schultz, although, of course, my family never had a car, because only rich folk did, but hey, it's a sunny day. I liked this.
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yeh, I get it, but someone
Posted on Sat, 13 Sep 2014
yeh, I get it, but someone stole it off me.
It's something the Asian students do TO WORN...think you missed out a few words here.
great story. true to life (and I'm not a great fan of Virginia Woolf either).
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