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i am sorry I did not know
Posted on Sat, 14 Dec 2019
i am sorry I did not know what to say about your poem, like a deer when it smells blood I guess, such a wrongness in it. Now you have explained I understand why. Because no one wants to be able to understand this subject, but also you long to,...
It's masterpiece example of free verse, line ends, space between stanzas. Even though all the information apart from last line and title, are about movement and stress, it ends with such a sense of peace and relief, I think because of the rhythm...
i like your images of the landscape, also how you link accent with water - sea, rain, mists, phlegm (!) How language like water is everywhere, acid or soft, salt or sweet, in the air, on the ground (page?) in us.The last lines I thought were...
"low glinting golden" I love the long vowels in this! Like sunbeams
"winter evening sunshine" and this line is nippy
"brightening bricks" and the immediate idea of cosiness here
I love the sound of "jostle a sway", jostle a shut in sort of word and sway wide open, and "tell their lie and seem to glide away" the repetition of "l" sounds and then the drift of "away". They conjure up ripples and movement
i am sorry I did not know
Posted on Sat, 14 Dec 2019
i am sorry I did not know what to say about your poem, like a deer when it smells blood I guess, such a wrongness in it. Now you have explained I understand why. Because no one wants to be able to understand this subject, but also you long to,...
Read full commentPosted in The Worst
Agree with Jane, your poem
Posted on Tue, 10 Dec 2019
Agree with Jane, your poem starts off tight and jabby then unwinds into calmness at the end.
Read full commentPosted in Awoke, then awaking
It's masterpiece example of
Posted on Sun, 08 Dec 2019
It's masterpiece example of free verse, line ends, space between stanzas. Even though all the information apart from last line and title, are about movement and stress, it ends with such a sense of peace and relief, I think because of the rhythm...
Read full commentPosted in Conditions for sleep
I liked the hurried way this
Posted on Thu, 05 Dec 2019
I liked the hurried way this starts and breathless way it finishes, like a sigh of relief. Pseudo Summer is a good phrase!
Read full commentPosted in From winter to …
i like your images of the
Posted on Wed, 04 Dec 2019
i like your images of the landscape, also how you link accent with water - sea, rain, mists, phlegm (!) How language like water is everywhere, acid or soft, salt or sweet, in the air, on the ground (page?) in us.The last lines I thought were...
Read full commentPosted in A Slip of the Mother Tongue
Posted on Sat, 30 Nov 2019
"low glinting golden" I love the long vowels in this! Like sunbeams
"winter evening sunshine" and this line is nippy
"brightening bricks" and the immediate idea of cosiness here
"dusk falls, then darkness
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Posted in The End of a Brighter November Day
yes, it was the turn of
Posted on Thu, 28 Nov 2019
yes, it was the turn of phrase :0) Voting for Sod's Law
Read full commentPosted in The Stealth of Great Misfortune
I love the sound of "jostle a
Posted on Sun, 24 Nov 2019
I love the sound of "jostle a sway", jostle a shut in sort of word and sway wide open, and "tell their lie and seem to glide away" the repetition of "l" sounds and then the drift of "away". They conjure up ripples and movement
And I...
Read full commentPosted in Night River
I sympathise with you about
Posted on Tue, 26 Nov 2019
I sympathise with you about seeing your forest cut down, it is soul wrenching! I hope it will not be a large chunk..
I liked the idea of sunsets being ancient, the sun has seen everything
Read full commentPosted in Canadian Woods
Enjoyed this very much
Posted on Thu, 21 Nov 2019
Enjoyed this very much
Read full commentPosted in Mars
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