Regarding your roses, sir. (IP)
By agnosticnun
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I walk in a sunlight world sometimes
And breathe it in entire, wanting to absorb it all
Quickly, before it fades away.
I love it for the fragility, not to want to linger.
When I admire the vast and shimmery water it is, in part,
Because I know that it can drown.
But you don’t see decay, never felt the lure of endings.
Your world is cheery and practical
Pink thornless roses, and a red
That is not at all like blood.
You show me dew and sunset,
Unsought companionship,
A crying child
As if the world could be made new.
Very well. I cannot face your practical talk,
Jobs and dinners and too-bright light.
I’m in love too much with leaving
To join you in the garden.
Truly, I would not wish you different –
But your roses all have thorns.
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Nice one agnosticun
I like the way you convey the constrasting outlooks on life, and that the narrator's attraction to things that is borne from their impermanence. It could have come across as quite doom laden, but I think you do a good job of conveying more subtle feelings. Well done.
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Very delicately done, and
Very delicately done, and subtle. I'm glad it got picked because I missed it before, and I really like it.
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Congratulations of a cherry
Congratulations of a cherry pick, a pick of the day and the poem of the week award. Thoroughly deserved.
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It says everything and
It says everything and nothing. Tantalising, which made me read it again and again. Very good writing and deserved pick of the week.
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This is really subtle and
This is really subtle and superb. What a lovely piece of writing. Thank you!
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