All together am I right now, iron-clad will bound, wound around ambitions,
Then collapsed when facing mere darting thoughts, caught in the spindled mind.
Tightly knitting the crystal essence of elusive hope, cope to forget whats gone.
The greatest act appearing strong yet capable, inescapable weaknessess.
Examine the frail nature of my shattered soul, goal to find eyes that are kind.
Faced with the opposition of a formidible foe, know that I will break in time.
Do I dare to continue these raging bouts of livid insanity, continuity of colission,
Realizing in the end my vaporous fate rings true, pulling apart Im feeling fine.
Delicate
Published by Chinobus on February 25, 2012 - 21:08
from the ABC set Poetry
from the ABC set Poetry
Comments
london_calling79 | February 25, 2012 - 21:15
I like the immediacy of this. Hope you don't mind me pointing out that there are a few apostrophe errors - or are they deliberate? It does feel like a few choice lines put together - not in a negative way!
Chinobus | February 25, 2012 - 21:22
Yes the apostraphes represents the haate the narrarator justifies himself and then switches his thoughts by seeing that his defenses cannot barricade himself from the flood of emotions and contradictions of his true delicate self. And I wrote this mobile so I could only use a few words. Thanks for feedback!!! :)
Silver Spun Sand | February 25, 2012 - 22:51
Great poem, Chinobus and I agree with london calling, it certainly does have 'immedicacy'.
Tina