Peeking through the flap, I saw it. The dark pool around her head. On the carpet. The stillness of it. The gravity of it. Hit me; this is it.
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insertponceyfre... | August 25, 2010 - 17:31
I like this! Not sure if it even counts as micro fiction though
marionwozere | August 25, 2010 - 22:28
Why's that?...what have I gone and missed?
insertponceyfre... | August 26, 2010 - 08:19
oh no! It wasn't meant as a criticism (in a bad way) - I was just impressed at how you'd managed to put so much into so few words! Sorry if it sounded negative, it wasn't intended to be
marionwozere | August 26, 2010 - 16:01
ha ha that's ok, I thought you were referring to a formula, like in Haiku poetry. My comment was supposed to be a in a kind of jokey voice too! Thanks :) :)
seashore | October 21, 2010 - 08:29
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