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Peter Pan Poems

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Published by MistakenMagic on January 26, 2009 - 16:30
from the ABC set Conversation With My Thirteen-Year-Old Self

They crouch in the corner of my eye,
as wicked and tricky as shadows.
Little urchins!

Their spines arch
like furrowed brows.

Wrapped in whimsical metaphors,
such rags fail to conceal
their deformity.

They are Peter Pan poems;
they refuse to grow up!

Older brothers and sisters
look down on them
with superior smiles.

These poems' eyes are white
like a page - poised for a pen,
as empty as a mourning womb.

They are selfish, selfish
and scuttle with clumsy rhythm.

I knock their greedy hands from my face.
Although I am no Frankenstein,
I will not abandon my children.

No, one day I will return to them
when they have a little more skin
on their bones.

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tamara (not verified) | January 27, 2009 - 11:44

Dear Magic,I really enjoyed this poem and particularly the second and third stanzas:
'Their spines arch
like furrowed brows.'

'Wrapped in whimsical metaphors,
such rags fail to conceal
their deformity.'
A beautiful poem.
Love from Lynne.x

Nathan Bednarek | January 27, 2009 - 13:13

I agree with the above- a very enjoyable poem. I particularly liked

'They are Peter Pan poems;
they refuse to grow up!'

because it reflects that atmosphere of 'Peter Pan Poems' ;-)

Good work, well done.

Nathan.

threeleafshamrock | January 27, 2009 - 14:43

Like the metaphorical aspect of this, I think it's clever; write the poems anyway...some of us like the way they are; without to much skin on the bones ;)

Chris X

MistakenMagic | January 27, 2009 - 15:26

Thank you so much Lynne, Nathan and Chris! I'm taking a leaf out of Jennifer's book and writing a poem about frustrating poetry ;)

Magic xxx

jennifer | January 28, 2009 - 22:32

I could not pick out a line that I liked best because every single one was so well crafted.

Well done! And I am glad I inspired you! How lovely, when writing breeds writing...! ABC, you triumph again!

J x

MistakenMagic | January 28, 2009 - 23:01

Thank you Jen! You are an inspiration ;)

Magic xxx

Silver Spun Sand | January 30, 2009 - 09:50

Just popped by to say many, many congrats on the cherry. More than well-deserved. You have such a gift for writing about things in an original way. Brilliant poem ... again:-)

Tina xxx