i love you
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skinner_jennifer | July 27, 2010 - 13:43
I like this poem, so many words
to describe love.
Nolan | July 27, 2010 - 14:09
Thank you Jenny! Yes especially the last few words. Some others gladly madly endlessly thankfully &&
kheldar | July 29, 2010 - 02:17
I really like this, but for me 'unashamedly', 'mercilessly' and 'helplessly' would have carried the them better. That said, a great poem.
trickymac | August 3, 2010 - 11:21
I think i agree with Kheldar (not that that makes it right :)) But really like it.
Nolan | August 4, 2010 - 23:05
The little verse consists of two complete English sentences- separated by a full stop. Each is grammatically sound and can stand on it’s own. The whole is coherent and makes perfect sense.
I can imagine,
i love you
i surrender ,
would appeal more to the masses but I wouldn’t even bother to show it to anyone. And honestly, please these aren’t definitions of love. It is a declaration of love. The phrase “boldly unashamed” acts as an adverb and it gives the mood of the poem.
Keep well keep the bright side up!
kheldar | August 4, 2010 - 23:52
Apologies for being one of the masses but now you have explained it I can see what you were striving for and it works fantastically well.
I will admit quite freely and openly that I do not as yet have a good enough comprehension of this type of poetry but using this poem as a wonderful example I can start to adjust the way I look at the written word and become less formulaic in my own writing.
Sorry if i caused any offence.
Nolan | August 5, 2010 - 09:02
Not offended in the least. Thank you kindly!
kuno-chan | August 6, 2010 - 04:44
nolan i agree with what you said. that it is a delaration of love. i agree full heartedly with you.
Cavalcaderl | August 8, 2010 - 18:38
I really like this I am glad you
have shared it with us all.As you
mention you have never shown it to anyone,
Nolan | August 10, 2010 - 14:05
You're looking for it
Cavalcaderl | August 10, 2010 - 20:24
I thought I found it?
But so much water under the bridge?
Nolan | August 10, 2010 - 20:52
You're testing the threshold
Cavalcaderl | August 11, 2010 - 00:23
New Oh! I thought at first
Surrender like fighting surrender!
or do you remember "Anne Shelton's"
song I alway's try remember sing words,
are Lay down your arm's
and surrender to mine!
Was a war song. "Run to the station
jump on the train
There in the glen
where the Roses entwine
Lay down your arm's
And surrender to mine!
Nice isn't it.
julie x your's are better.
Nolan | August 11, 2010 - 10:16
Yes it is
Cavalcaderl | August 12, 2010 - 16:09
Oh! thanks. I often get the
wrong end of the stick? that is a saying.
Putting my foot in it. Love to reminise may
spelt wrong, over old songs, do you. Pop would
play on leave from Navy etc; trot off to pub quick?
Tom Brown | January 6, 2011 - 21:20
Last man standing.
Nolan | February 5, 2012 - 23:05
A dweller on the threshold.
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