Sitting in the ruins of the hospital I wait for the world to end. The rain has diminished to a soft drizzle and the first signs of a grey dawn delineate the crumbling walls.
There was a hail of gunfire shortly after I brought the Director down, but my legions formed around me and gave pursuit. I am left alone now, the war grumbling on but my role in it ended at last. The mouth of the pit into which I cast my enemy has closed for eternity, the crumpled body he was occupying sprawled across its lid.
All that’s left is to find you.
Early the next morning I’m wandering across ‘our’ park when I notice a newspaper lying there. “Hospital chief’s murderer killed in police battle” runs the headline over my picture. It can’t be right because I’m still here – clearly even now the lies continue, but they warned us about Babylon.
At long last the heavens are beginning to open, the clouds rent by rays of blinding light. On the other side of the park I can just make out the celestial city with its river of crystal flowing towards me.
We’ll be together – not long now.
Comments
rjnewlyn | September 16, 2010 - 23:41
Thanks for everyone's support with this!
insertponceyfre... | September 17, 2010 - 05:58
I have really enjoyed this story Rob - from start to finish
lenchenelf | September 17, 2010 - 09:08
Good exercise in less is more, plenty to mull on, thoroughly enjoyed. atb Lena xx
Silver Spun Sand | September 17, 2010 - 09:11
Wonderful, Rob...except, I didn't want it to end;-(
Tina
rjnewlyn | September 17, 2010 - 23:32
Thanks Insert and Lena and Tina - I'm glad you liked it and really appreciate your encouragement along the way. I'm sorry it had to end as well but maybe that's how things should be ...
Next week something different!
Rob
fatboy74 | September 18, 2010 - 22:01
Read this earlier from beginning to end and really enjoyed it. (:-)
rjnewlyn | September 19, 2010 - 00:10
Thanks very much fatboy74 - I'm very pleased it works that way (it's a bit different reading all in one go to submitting them a week at a time). Rob
MistakenMagic | September 19, 2010 - 23:16
Absolutely wonderful, Rob! I've really loved reading all your installments. Well done on the cherry ;)
Magic xxx
rjnewlyn | September 20, 2010 - 00:27
Thanks very much indeed Magic - I'm honoured!
Rob
Sooz006 | June 10, 2012 - 13:58
I loved every sparse word of this, a proper craftsman.My only complaint is that I think you finished it too soon. It could have gone on and on and you could still be posting chapters here, in the future in June 2012. But I suppose the old adage about leaving them wanting more, holds true.
rjnewlyn | June 10, 2012 - 15:11
Thanks very much Sooz for sticking with it. I'm not sure I could have extended it. I guess I'm trying at the moment to see how long something of this nature can be kept going (albeit moving rather slowly). Rob