Mephisto’s troops were beginning to gather – they must have smelled the fighting but still couldn’t quite locate us, sniffing around the tower blocks like hopeful dogs.
Theresa was on her feet, ready to go. ‘Are you sure you’re up to this?’ I asked, but regretted it almost immediately.
She grinned. ‘You’ve changed, Sam,’ she said. ‘I’m beginning to wonder whose side you’re on.’
I spat on the floor. ‘I work for myself; always have, always will.’ But I noticed she was still smiling and it riled me.
As the pale sun rose, we fell on them and slaughtered the lot, their screams reverberating as they were sucked away leaving the air reeking of smoke and sulphur. It was a tedious battle – Theresa seemed in her element, but I’ve never had much enthusiasm for that sort of thing. Is that ironic? So be it.
Still, we worked well enough together and the killing didn’t take too long. Then the alarm went out and we had to disappear rapidly. By nightfall the city was far behind us and I found myself in the corner of a field, struggling to assemble a tent. This mission was going to be stranger than I’d anticipated.
Comments
maisie | May 21, 2011 - 00:34
I like the local sound of your speech in character - some lose this in order to keep a word count.
it might be sharper if you're brave enough to remove the 'but' in two places, then you've only got 198 words! heh
Silver Spun Sand | May 21, 2011 - 12:57
For me, Rob, the sentence that stands out for me, among quite a few,'It was a tedious battle'. Almost an oxymoron, and highly effective in further enhancing part 12's somewhat delicious taciturn flavour;-) Much enjoyed.
Tina
insertponceyfre... | May 21, 2011 - 21:47
"our hero from hell doesn't feel like fighting today" I love the spoiler - you make it sound like the Archers gone very very wrong.
rjnewlyn | May 21, 2011 - 22:48
Thanks very much Maisie and Tina and Insert. And many thanks for the cherry.
Yes, I see what you mean Maisie. I tend not to edit on the site but I might pull those out when putting the whole of it together (whenever that happens).
I like the Archers idea, Insert. I hadn't thought of it that way - seems worth pursuing (perhaps to see exactly how wrong it could be ...)
Rob
MistakenMagic | May 22, 2011 - 20:12
Love the world-weariness of your narrator here, Rob. And yes, Theresa still kicks ass! Keep 'em coming ;)
Magic xxx
rjnewlyn | May 24, 2011 - 00:35
Many thanks Magic! Yes, she does and long may it continue ...
Rob
Sooz006 | May 15, 2012 - 14:16
Didn't anybody teach him that it's so rude to spit. Liking Theresa.
rjnewlyn | May 17, 2012 - 22:23
I don't think they teach manners down there ...
Rob