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At Least You Passed

Posted by shoebox on June 16, 2008 - 19:48
from the ABC set Smooth Sailing I

At Least You Passed

At least
You passed
Through my life
And I enjoyed
The privilege
Of holding your loveliness
In my arms,
Of wiping away
A few of your tears
At least
We toured
Site after site
I see you with your Kodak
The waterfall’s mist
Just over your head,
Red ferns
Lilting at your feet
At least
We got
A fair warning
Of our sure, impending doom
We then
Made the most
Of two lovers’ fading days
Before we were touched
By the ghost.

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Comments

Dynamaso | June 17, 2008 - 02:47

This is simple, beautiful and quite sad. I particularly liked the line:

'And I enjoyed
The privilege
Of holding your loveliness
In my arms'

jennifer | June 17, 2008 - 10:31

I like this image

'I see you with your Kodak
The waterfall’s mist
Just over your head,'

Because you're right, we remember 'snapshots' don't we?

Very sad.

sunshine | June 17, 2008 - 17:47

very poignant, very moving. I like the reference to the Kodak, the gathering of memories which was observed so closely and which has now become a memory. Margot

shoebox | June 19, 2008 - 01:14

Thanks, guys, for commenting. My, I feel better! Peace