The Leaving

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from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

Caught up in a whirlwind
of buying duvets and curtains,
mugs, plates and bowls,
electric kettles and toasters.

So much so, I’d not considered
what it would be like – the leaving.
It didn’t seem five minutes ago,
I’d been buying highchairs
and baby-grows.

The rain was coming down
in stair-rods as they drove off
that morning in a clapped out
Morris Minor. The car packed
to the gills with duffle-bags
and hold-alls – my daughter
and her friend.

Waving goodbye, just in sight,
through the leaves of a potted
avocado plant, lovingly grown
from seed which she couldn’t
leave behind, was her hand,
so fragile, as they hit
the open road.

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Comments

Bradene | November 5, 2008 - 13:45

Another winner Tina, this is really gentle in its composition yet it still manages to pierce the heart. Lovely. Val x

MistakenMagic | November 5, 2008 - 17:59

The last stanza was just perfect. You made a simple sentiment very heartfelt. Beautiful :)

Magic xxx

Silver Spun Sand | November 5, 2008 - 18:24

Val, thank you. I have yet to read your latest poems. Busy all day. I shall make time a bit later on, I have promised myself.

But thanks to you for taking time out to read mine and I am glad it was worthwhile:-)

Tina x

Silver Spun Sand | November 5, 2008 - 18:25

Glad you enjoyed it, Magic. It is a day entrenched in my mind, and I only just yesterday found a way of expressing it after so many years.

Tina xxx