Their bedroom door ajar,
I catch my breath;
watch my father
tend my mother...
brushing, combing,
plaiting her hair.
She’d grab his hand,
every once in a while...
smile like a kid
given candy...
He’d sing a verse,
or two, of ‘Bringing
in the Sheaves’...vainly
bid her join in;
a Mission hymn –
they used to go, together,
when those were the days.
Poppa often tried
to reach her this way; buries
her face in his sleeve –
calls him, ‘My boy’.
Kneels beside her
on their bed –
shuts his eyes
like he’s saying
a prayer...touches
her arm
talks to her, softly;
does his best
to cut her nails –
seems the scissors,
shiny-bright,
kind of spook her.
Just a child,
as I was then,
I’d often wondered
how love was made...
and that afternoon,
I knew.
Comments
insertponceyfre... | June 19, 2011 - 21:56
wonderful, tender portrait. well done!
Nathan Bednarek | June 19, 2011 - 23:12
Yes, very tender indeed. I love the ending- it's a spit'n'polish finish to a poem describing making love in a an unusual way, form an unusual point of view. Very interesting and very well done.
Nathan x
Highhat | June 20, 2011 - 05:44
Beautifully tender Tina- as others have said.
;)Pia
Silver Spun Sand | June 20, 2011 - 09:03
Many thanks, insert;-)
Silver Spun Sand | June 20, 2011 - 09:04
Pleased you liked this one, Nathan. Hope you have a good week;-)
Tina xx
Silver Spun Sand | June 20, 2011 - 09:05
Glad you thought so, Pia, and I hope the sun is shining for you today, as it is here;-)
Tina
L G Meadows | June 20, 2011 - 09:16
Great poem showing how love is nutured, not just made! Enjoyed it, so touching.
Silver Spun Sand | June 20, 2011 - 10:53
Thanks, LG. Kind of you to read and to take time out to let me know you enjoyed it;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | June 20, 2011 - 10:55
Ta muchly, Richard...I must have been watching too much TV from the other side of the pond;-)
Pleased you enjoyed, and your lovely comment, a poem in itself.
Tina
Cavalcaderl | June 20, 2011 - 15:58
New Silver-Spun-Sand
Well deserved cherries!
Hi! Really romantic poem, if only
romance could be just like that!
Regardless of age.But this is like
other's say beautiful and tender.
Sounds like never a row.
julie xx
Silver Spun Sand | June 20, 2011 - 16:00
Thanks, Julie. Pleased you liked this one. Hope you are having a good week;-)
Tina xx
the unfolding head | June 20, 2011 - 16:21
echoing other comments... very tender. I especially liked the following lines:
"Kneels beside her
on their bed –
shuts his eyes
like he’s saying
a prayer...touches
her arm"
very delicate.
Silver Spun Sand | June 20, 2011 - 16:39
tuh - much obliged to you;-) Tina
skinner_jennifer | June 21, 2011 - 09:30
This is such a tender and loving piece Tina, it almost brought a tear to my eye as I read. A true
picture of two people who love each other so much.
Thankyou for a very moving read.
Jenny.
Silver Spun Sand | June 21, 2011 - 10:33
Many thanks, Jenny. I am pleased I managed to convey that to you;-)
Tina
Prettyrose | June 26, 2011 - 00:45
Hi Tina :)))
I agree a very clever, moving fantastic spin on another side of closeness. Well done enjoyed it.
Keep Writing
Keep Smiling :)))
T x
Silver Spun Sand | June 26, 2011 - 09:15
Thanks, Prettyrose (lovely name, by the way;-)
Tina x