Before You Walk Away...

Now then Silver. This gets serious, and that's because of what you have written and because of the way that you have written it.

It trundles along nicely thankyou; until one of those images of yours jumps out and grabs and then wont stop squeezing.

Bycycle propped against the wall. Summer house that blew down. Made it a first. G plan settee.

Wonderfull. I would look at the very end and consider additions - unless your intention was to leave us intrigued ;)

Hi Tina,

I have a funny feeling that I know what the bombshell
was, but not that sure, is it something to do with
your daughter?

Anyway this was such a nostalgic poem, that I can
tell means a lot to you. It's good to write such
memories in poems. You do write them so well.

Thankyou for sharing.

Jenny.

Hi there, scratch;-) Many, many thanks for looking at this in such detail, and again, you may be right about the ending; hence the edit, which, I feel, still leaves room for a touch of intrigue;-)

Your advice, invaluable. Have a good week;-)

Tina

Thanks, Jenny, for reading this one, and I guess the answer to your question is, that this poem, as with any poem, is about what it means to its reader, so I guess you have to be right;-)

Pleased you enjoyed, and I hope Monday is a good one for you.

Tina

Lovely memories flow like a waterfall!

Thanks so much, Hilary;-)

Tina

Descriptive- the bombshell hit me too at the end- I guess I should have seen it coming..But the title really says it doesn't it!
such goodies in your shell of a poem..

;)Pia

Thanks, so very much, Pia.

Yes, you are indeed right. I thought the title did say it all. Really glad you picked up on that. You're a star;-)

Tina;-)

Thoroughly enjoyed this one Tina and whatever the ending means, it works brilliantly. Well done. :-)

Thanks, fb;-)

Tina

I like that element of mystery and it works all the better for leaving the reader wondering. I suspect I will I will keep on wondering, Tina.....

Mystery and intrigue - nothing quite like it as you say, Coral;-)

Anyway, pleased you enjoyed, and I appreciate your telling me;-)

Tina x

Not just a selection of memories but a collection of emotions that don't half take the reader on a journey in more ways than one - this is yet another testament to your talent Tina and has left me a little speechless, as your poetry always does. Very much enjoyed :)

Rachel xx

I'm really pleased you enjoyed your 'journey', Rachel. Many thanks for your lovely comment.

By the way, I hope your Christmas tree doesn't drop too many needles. We have one this year, but it is a little 'diddy' one - all of two foot tall. We have grown it in a little pot and then brought it indoors, and hope it will be a bit larger next
year;-)

Tina xx

Oh Tina what a wonderful idea - I want a 'tree for life' now! I'm getting one first thing in the Spring - really is such a lovely idea that and so much better than having to watch the poor thing wither or worse still, mess around with plastic ones that end up looking like a half-bald toilet brush anyway! ;)

Rachel xx

You 'bald toilet brush' really made me smile, Rachel. Couldn't have put it better myself.
If you do get one in the Spring, a tree I mean, we can compare notes as to how they're doing. Thank you for cheering up my day;-)

Tina xx

Compare notes and share tips, Tina ;) (not that I have any, mind - my fingers are only a pale shade of lime and not fully green yet, I'm still a relative newbie to it all). Your comment has really cheered up my day too :)

Rachel xx

Love the intrigue at the end. A great piece of writing with wonderful imagery.

My thanks to you shyrewode...both for reading and taking the time and trouble to let me know you enjoyed;-)

Tina